This short story came about for the Gibberish writing challenge. I did not make the cut, and rightly so. but decided to take part, or join in. just to see if I could do it I guess.
The first part of this challenge is for us to write a story depicting a chase scene. here is a link to this competition, if you would like to take part. Gibberish writing challenge
if you have some free time, (probably at the end of this comp) Could you please take a look at this? and let me know where I went wrong or right.
“Michael what the hell did you just do? Have you got any idea of the amount of trouble we are in? those guys don’t play around. We need to get out of here.”
“It was a mistake, I didn’t mean to have sex with Tommy’s girlfriend, hell how was I supposed to know that she was involved with him of all people. Brad said.”
“You freaking idiot. We still owe him money! did you not even stop to think about that? Now they not just want to beat the living daylights out of you, they will want their money back for sure.” Michael said.
“Michael its ok. Let’s figure a way out of this, we still have time, don’t we?” Brad replied.
“Brad, we did, but not anymore. I just got a text from Samuel. He said that he saw Tommy with his crew, they left the bar in a rush, and it looked like they are heading this way.”
Shit, we need to get out of here, right now.”
“Where are we even going to go? We can’t go to Samuel, what about Andy’s place?.”
“That’s not a bad idea, they don’t know where he lives. Let’s head over there. Call him and tell him we are on the way.” Michael said.
“Hey Andy, its Brad, can you talk?”
“Yea sure, what’s up?”
“Andy, I messed up, really bad.”
“What did you do this time, you owe Tommy more money?”
“No, well we still owe him, but I kind of slept with Amy, his girlfriend.”
“You did what, why?”
“I didn’t mean to, I was at Cody’s bar, you know we are always there. so, I was minding my own business, when Amy came and sat next to me. you know how sexy she is right? Those blue eyes, long brown hair, she wore a short miniskirt with a blue top. I thought she was single. so we started chatting.
“Wow, wow, stop there, did you just say Amy, Tommy’s girl?”
‘Yea, that Amy. anyway, she was telling me how she just gone through a bad break up and wanted someone to take her mind off things. So, I was like hell yea. she then said let’s go to my place. It’s like 2 mins from here. I said yes, obviously. next thing we are at her place. It was fancy alright, a big 32 inch tv, a 3 seater, we started kissing as soon as we got in , before you know it, we started undressing each other and yea you can imagine the rest…”
“I didn’t know she was Tommy’s but yes, that Amy.”
“Oh shit, dude you are going to die tonight, you need to get out of there, like now.”
“That’s why I’m calling you, can we come over?”
“Whos’ we?”
“Just Michael and myself.”
“Yea, sure, hurry up.”
“What did, Andy say?” Michael asked.
“He said its fine, we can go.”
“Let’s go already!”
I can’t believe what Brad has just done, I mean can’t the guy ever learn from mistakes. I should have listened to Owen the other day. he told me that I need to cut him out of my life for good. Otherwise, I’ll end up dead soon. Brad wasn’t a bad guy, he just loved gambling and sex way too much. He some how owed Tommy just over 50 grand, he has to pay him everything back plus interest in less than 2 weeks. But after what he has just done, that deadline will be pushed forward to tonight, no doubt about that.
Tommy was a big man, about 2 meters tall, weighs a tad under 120kgs. He was in a fight back a couple months back and let’s just say the other guy is still in ICU. Tommy doesn’t care, if you owe him money, get into a fight with him. he will make sure that you pay. Nobody around here wants to get on his bad side. I had to some how get the two of us all the way to Michael.
Getting myself and Brad out of my apartment was done rather quickly, I stayed at the first level. it had a small garden which was he main reason for moving in here. I only had 1 bedroom, a small bathroom, open plan kitchen with a tv/dining room next to it. I could just fit a 3-seater couch in. it wasn’t much but it was mine, after all these years, it was what I was most proud of.
We went out the front door, my car a blue Toyota Tazz was parked literally like five meters away from me, we both climbed in, I started the car and made my way out of the complex. Michael’s place was about an hour from me. he was still new in town so, we figured that Tommy, and his crew wouldn’t know who or where he stayed. Michael was a chef at Sally’s, it was around the corner from his place. Tommy would never go to a place like that. It was a more upper-class establishment.
“Michael are you sure about this? I mean I don’t want Andy to be involved in this. He has done so much to get his life turned around. I wouldn’t be able to sleep if anything happened to him because of me.”
“Brad, I’m sure. what I need you to do is to keep looking in your left mirror, if you see a car following us let me know, ok?”
“Got it.”
I needed to keep him busy, take his mind off what was bound to happen to us.
“Michael, I think this car has been following us? you see it?”
“Yea, I’ve seen it, been watching him for a few minutes now. You keep watching yea.”
I couldn’t make out what car it was, we knew that tommy drove a white BMW, it was about 19:00 so I couldn’t see much. Figured I should stay calm, no use in getting brad, worried over nothing. So, for the next few km I kept a close eye.
“Michael that car is getting closer, you think its him.”
“Its him alright, can’t see who is with him though, shit.”
“Driver faster dude, we need to get away from him, Andy’s place is still a half hour away.”
“I know, chill.”
I knew it was his car, he had a white BMW, could tell it was his by the number plate, it read T-Man. The road ahead was still long, we were reaching Colestone, a small town, it had only a couple hundred people . Not much place for us to hide. The road was quiet, so, if need be, I would put my foot all the way down on the accelerator.
I was waiting for him to make the first move. See what he would do. Then I would take it from there. I was prepared. I brought my Glock 9 with, didn’t have many bullets, didn’t want to use it either, but with him, you had to be prepared for everything.
I looked into my rearview once again, and saw he was flashing his lights at us. I carried on, then he started to hoot. My foot was on the pedal, pressed still to go 80km an hour. But nervously waiting for the command to double that, with a Tazz I wasn’t sure if it could, but tonight we would both find out.
“Michael, someone is trying to stick their head out of the window, I can’t see what he is doing.”
“Brad, open the cubby hole, there should be a Glock, check that it is loaded.”
“Ok. Let me see!”
“Its loaded, are we going to start shooting at them?”
“No!, well not yet anyway. Its just a precaution. If they start then you fire back, yea.”
“Got it.”
“You see that guy, he still sticking his head out?”
“Nope.”
Just as I was about to check my mirror again, we got hit from behind. My head jolted forward, I swerved the car to the right. Braked has hard as I could, turned the steering wheel as far left as it could go. luckily I did as I Just kissed the barrier on the right with the back of my car.
“You ok Brad?”
“Yea, you?”
“Hold on tight brother, shit is about to get real.”
“I hope you have insurance, coz I think your car is about to be written off.”
“I don’t care about that right now, lets focus on getting out of here.”
“Are they still in the car?”
It looks like someone is getting out, it looks like Tim, can’t miss that ugly fool anywhere. He still has that blue jersey on, doesn’t he ever take it off? Looks like he has got a bit of a limp too. Tommy’s BMW doesn’t look to great either.
“Brad, what is he doing?”
“Oh, he is coming this way, you better get the car started.”
“I’m trying, it doesn't wat to, I think I’ve flooded it, shit.”
“Let’s make a run for it?”
“Let’s do it, what the hell, grab the money and let’s get out of here. brad, lets got left yea, you see that building at about 11’o clock?”
“Yea I see it, that one that looks like a church.”
“Yea, now when I say go, we go. you run as fast as you can and don’t stop until you get there.”
“Brad looked at me, with a worried look on his face, like he knew this might be the last time we see each other.”
“On the count of 3.”
I jumped out of the car, ran around it, and sprinted across the road, and just ran and ran. I didn’t look back as i figured that, it would slow me down.
“Brad, you good I shouted.”
“Brad!”
I turned around and saw that Brad wasn’t behind me. did he fall down somewhere? get lost somehow? knowing him that was possible.
I looked up and saw someone pointing a gun at two people.
I ran back up as fast as I could, I needed to get their before Brad did what I think he was planning to do all along.
“Tommy chill, we are sorry, brad didn’t mean to sleep with Amy, he didn’t even know that she was your girl.”
“You idiot, everyone in town knew that she was mine, you think I’m stupid.”
“Brad, put the gun down, this isn’t the way to solve this.”
“Michael, this is the only way that I think I can. if I put this gun down, then he is going to use it to shoot me. I got this.”
“Tommy, this is between me and you, let him go. Or else.”
“Or else what? You don’t have the balls to shoot me, I want my money and I want you to pay for what you did with Amy.”
“I have your money right here in the car. As for Amy, you can beat the living daylights out of me if that’s what you want. But just leave Michael out of this.”
“Brad, tonight is the night, where everyone will know, that they can’t mess with me in future. If I let you go, then every other guy in town will want to do the same thing as you did. How they hell will I still be respected?”
“Brad don’t do it, if you shoot him then you have to shoot Tim as well. Do you really want that?” Michael said.
“I don’t want to, but I want this to end.”
“Michael, you need to calm your boy down, he is going to do something stupid”.
Brad was emotional, he started crying, his hands where still shaking.
“She just came and sat next to me, and started talking. next thing she invited me to her place. what was I supposed to do, she was so beautiful.”
“Put the gun down, then we can talk about how we can sort this out. how both of us can benefit from this. what you say?” Tommy said.
A loud bang went off, I feared the worst. but it wasn’t Brad who had pulled the trigger. it was Tim. he shot Tommy straight through the back of his head. Tommy fell down instantly, blood coming out of his head. Tim’s face and body splattered with blood.
“Tim, what was that, what did you do?”
“Tim, what did you do?”
“He had it coming guys, we lost one of our suppliers’ dealers a few weeks ago. all because this fool decided to beat him so bad that he ended up in a coma. now no one wants to supply us. we haven’t been making any money since that, so while we were chasing you guys, I figured I could use this opportunity to become the Boss, get our suppliers back and all that.”
“Tim, I get what you are saying, but what about us? everyone will think that we did it?.”
“I know, let me think”.
We stood there for what felt like ages, Tim going over in his head with what to do with us. while still holding is gun in his hand. he could just easily shoot us, police would think its a drug deal gone wrong.”
“Michael, get in the car and head north until you reach Cleverly. once there go to a place called Jeffreys Bar. tell the bouncer I sent you. he will tack you upstairs to meet Jeffrey. he will take it from there. don’t worry nothing will happen to you, he owes me.”
“Guess we don’t have any other choice, do we? Brad give me the gun, lets go before he changes his mind.”
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